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i.
sometimes when i wake up
before the sun rises, when i’m all alone
and it feels like i might be the only person in the world

i notice that my face is wet

and i wonder if it’s because
i’ve been swimming with you in my dreams

ii.
i remember you
in the summer nights under the corsican stars
and the warmth of your skin in the cold seawater

i remember
how the phosphorescence coated our bodies
as we swam together,  
the salty tang of the ocean and your fingers up my spine
and us glowing like soft stars in the night

i remember how i wished it could last forever

iii.
now i wonder if the tides and my tears
were so different after all

edit 28/12/13: i can't believe i got a DD on this, i'm not sure what to say other than thank you so much!



dedicated to sophia ~nyogu, let's always be mermaids in our dreams.

i actually like the way this turned out!
i've been identifying a lot with mermaids lately. i don't know what it is about them, or me, i guess. pretty inspired by molly bloom's soliloquy from ulysses and stories of nereids in greek myth.

how does this poem make you feel? is there a story behind it? what does the imagery evoke in your mind? how effective is the tides/tears comparison?
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Given 2013-12-28
letters from the sea by ~Hildetann ( Suggested by Halatia and Featured by Beccalicious )
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Chinook84 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014
Congrats on the DD, first of all. It's well deserved. 

You have very flowing writing, and yes, the tides and tears comparison makes a powerful image.
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Hildetann Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Student General Artist
thank you so much c:
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is kind of a bittersweet poem that really tugs at the heart. I loved it :3
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Hildetann Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Student General Artist
thank you <3
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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polislava Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013
Love the sea as a metaphor for tears. It's original and true..
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Hildetann Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2014  Student General Artist
thank you, im glad you liked it c:
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polislava Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014
It's a fine work :)
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Student General Artist
It makes me feel the warm salty sea in the waves at night, and wow..... :hug: I'm just dreaming as I write this!
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Hildetann Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Student General Artist
thank you so much :heart:
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