sometimes when i wake up
before the sun rises, when i’m all alone
and it feels like i might be the only person in the world
i notice that my face is wet
and i wonder if it’s because
i’ve been swimming with you in my dreams
i remember you
in the summer nights under the corsican stars
and the warmth of your skin in the cold seawater
how the phosphorescence coated our bodies
as we swam together,
the salty tang of the ocean and your fingers up my spine
and us glowing like soft stars in the night
i remember how i wished it could last forever
now i wonder if the tides and my tears
were so different after all
edit 28/12/13: i can't believe i got a DD on this, i'm not sure what to say other than thank you so much!
dedicated to sophia ~nyogu, let's always be mermaids in our dreams.
i actually like the way this turned out!
i've been identifying a lot with mermaids lately. i don't know what it is about them, or me, i guess. pretty inspired by molly bloom's soliloquy from ulysses and stories of nereids in greek myth.
how does this poem make you feel? is there a story behind it? what does the imagery evoke in your mind? how effective is the tides/tears comparison?
This is very well written. It has a sad calm about it and made me feel an odd sense of longing. I feel as though I was drifting in the sea, waiting for someone from the past that I'll never see again.
I'm happy that you got a DD, this piece truly deserves it.
please dont kiss my feet they are very cold
and you are MY favourite mermaid poet.
Congrats on the DD, well deserved
And to answer your questions:
how does this poem make you feel?
It makes me feel sad and a little bit nostalgic, like I can't quite remember a memory from long ago, or a past life.
is there a story behind it?
I believe that there is; but the story depends on the experiences of the reader, and that is why this poem is great.
what does the imagery evoke in your mind?
I can feel the pull of the waves, and the longing ache in my heart.
how effective is the tides/tears comparison?
Very effective. It's not a comparison that's used a lot, and so it evokes a great image.
Congrats on a well-deserved DD!